| Well, Amina, thanks for letting me have your draft in such good time. |
| Oh, that's alright. |
| I was just very anxious to hear what you think of it. |
| You can see that I decided to change the topic. |
| I had been interested in looking at Barings Factory. |
| Oh, I think the hospital was a much better choice. |
| In fact... well... I have to say that I thought it was good. |
| Oh? |
| There's still lots of work to be done... |
| Oh yes... of course. |
| But there's plenty of good ideas. |
| It opens well and the first chapter is fine |
| but the middle section really stood out for me... most interesting. |
| That's amazing |
| because I really didn't find it a bit easy to write... |
| How long did you work on the whole thing? |
| Well, I spent about two or three weeks reading and doing general research |
| and then I dashed the writing off very quickly... |
| so about four weeks in all. |
| Well, that's about par for the course. |
| You've got a while yet to make the changes. |
| Oh right... no problem... |
| Right. Let's have a look at my notes here. |
| Okay. Starting with section headings... |
| the broad divisions are good but you'll have to re-do the actual headings. |
| I've made some suggestions in the margins... |
| Okay. Thanks. |
| Now, this information on local housing... |
| I can see why you put it there |
| but it really isn't relevant to the approach you've taken. |
| I think I see what you mean. |
| Now... what did I say about the interviews? |
| I worked very hard on those. |
| I really thought they were valuable. |
| They are, Amina, but they're very complex and rather unclear at the moment. |
| You're going to have to spend a bit of time making the data a lot clearer. |
| Okay... |
| as long as I don't have to remove them altogether... |
| No, don't worry. |
| What about the chronology... |
| the list of dates? |
| I wasn't sure whether I should rewrite those. |
| My advice on that is to take them out. I feel it makes the whole piece appear too simplistic. |
| Okay, if it'll help. |
| Now, there are a couple of other books I'd like you to look at. |
| Have you got a pen? |
| Right... Approaches to Local History by John Mervis... |
| Right... |
| And then I think you need to think about ways of representing interview data. |
| Have a look at Sight and Sound by Kate Oakwell. |
| Sight and Sound. |
| Then you know I'm going away on holiday next week... |
| Yes. |
| So when you've made the changes, I suggest you show the work to your Support Tutor. |
| Support Tutor... right... |
| Then you do the proof reading... |
| Proof reading... |
| When by, do you think? |
| I'd aim for the 29th of June |
| and after that you should get it laser printed... |
| but be careful because the computer centre closes on 10 July. |
| And then I hand it in to...? |
| Oh, the Faculty Office as usual. |
| Okay, that's fine. |
| I think I'm all set now! |
| Thanks very much for all your help. |
| A pleasure. |
| See you when I get back. |
| Yep. Thanks, Dr Bryson. |
| Bye. |
| Bye. |